Just as the adventure began with Lady Blue, it progressed to a search for justice here. In order to quell the flood in injustice and hold back the darkness, Moragah, goddess of wisdom and defender of the weak, created a new kind of priestess. Lady Justice. You can find her here:
Sometime between Tasha Stewart witnessing the murder of her parents and the attempt on her life, she made a deal with a goddess. In exchange for super powers Tasha would bring Justice to the city. A cold relentless Justice, no lawyers, no courts, and no mercy. Can she deliver on her promise and still remain who she is at her core or will she be absorbed into the cold unfeeling force that is Lady Justice?
And soon we will take you further with the coming of Lady Shadow.
Well, it happened again. I was, once again, accused of being too stiff or formal in the way I use language in my writing. Allow me to explain, when I was in school, (mid last century), we learned to write so everybody could understand the message. That meant that, no matter the dialect a person spoke, the written English was a common core easily understood by all. You spoke to your friends one way, to your parents a different way, but you wrote in clearly understood English for everybody.
Okay, the book in question is Hope, second edition soon to be released. The problem lies in how she writes and speaks to her mother, as well as her self talk. Hope is the child of an aristocratic father, an academic, and a social climbing mother. As a child she learned to speak from her parents. It was naturally a bit formal. That first learning will always stay with you, so her self talk will be in that same pattern.
So, when she talks to her neighbor, she talks like him so he understands, when she speaks with a sales girl, she speaks like the locals do, so they understand, but when she talks to herself or to her mother, she reverts to a more familiar way.
Now, re-read the first paragraph. Yes, it is a bit formal. The second paragraph is a bit more relaxed to read. Yup, I did this on purpose to demonstrate my point. The differences are subtle, but they are there.
And yes, before I start writing a book, I spend some time talking to the main character, get their backstory, and find out what makes them tick. Doesn’t everybody?
Now, if you enjoy the possibilities of a vast vocabulary beautifully crafted into sentences and paragraphs, go to this location and read the introduction by Rex Murphy. Rex is a god of language.
The target for this round was to exceed 60,000 words and finish the rough first draft of the WIP. Mission accomplished. That draft closed off at just over 63,000 words on Monday. Settling back into revisions of other work now so, puttin’ ‘er on cruise for a while.
Here’s hoping you all reach your goals this round. Cheering you all on!
This is a conversation I’ve had a few times at the garage while waiting for my car to be ready.
Old fart to me: Woman, why the hell are you still driving that junker? You’re in here getting it fixed every other week.
Me to Him: Well, let me see. It’s paid for long since. I only spent about a thousand on repairs last year. It’s cheaper to insure. When I do get repairs I’m paying my neighbor instead of some CEO in a dealership so my money stays in the community. I don’t mind the dogs being in it. Should I keep going? There’s more. Let’s see, it has a small engine so last year I spent less on gas than you did last month. Did I mention I don’t have payments on it?
Him: Oh fer fuck sake. Walks away.
Me. quietly. Another one bites the dust. 🙂
Okay, I’ll admit it, I had way too much fun with that.
Now for the ROW80 check-in.
Okay, ROW80. My target for this round is 60,000 words.
Last check in….1500
Hope all of you are exceeding your targets this week.